After staring went to a little store on the corner and bought some chips and beef jerky and a bottle of iced tea.
Seems to me like at least one word is missing after the word "staring", probably more than one.
“You have to have to pay for quality, and that’s me… Bulletina.”
Duplicate "have to" in that sentence.
If I want clothes or something she gets it to me.She books my flights and hotels… and sends cars to pick me up and stuff, and she picks it up all up herself.”
Missing a space between the first and second sentences. Also too many "up"s in the last sentence. Probably the first one doesn't belong.
It didn’t dent the titanium casing, but a few seconds later, both devices imploded in a shower of green sparks.
Stray comma after "later". You have to watch out for commas. It's easy to overuse them.
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ae_stories,
February 14 2009, 04:26:49 UTC 3 years ago
February 14 2009, 06:10:07 UTC 3 years ago
-r
February 14 2009, 05:28:47 UTC 3 years ago
One quick fix:
“Then I guess you did shoot me,” Diana said. “What do you suppose I should do about that?”
Missing the second 'do,' methinks.
February 14 2009, 16:08:38 UTC 3 years ago
Typo Report
Was gonna mention that one.Seems to me like at least one word is missing after the word "staring", probably more than one.
Duplicate "have to" in that sentence.
Missing a space between the first and second sentences. Also too many "up"s in the last sentence. Probably the first one doesn't belong.
Stray comma after "later". You have to watch out for commas. It's easy to overuse them.
February 14 2009, 20:05:29 UTC 3 years ago
February 17 2009, 05:47:24 UTC 3 years ago
That is the question—And
PHI upon't, sirrah!