—not that they wouldn’t easy enough to find on an internal scan, but why make things easier than they were?—then bent that wire so that it would be knocked out by surge of power when the door first discharged its shock.
Missing a "be" after "wouldn't" and a "the" between "by" and "surge".
It was his lair, more than that… it was his heavenly demesne.
Stared the parenthetical phrase "more than that" with a comma and ended it with an ellipsis.
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February 18 2009, 04:24:32 UTC 3 years ago
February 18 2009, 04:31:49 UTC 3 years ago
"Let the chips fall as they may"
Include microchips?
February 18 2009, 04:35:55 UTC 3 years ago
Typo Report
Missing a "be" after "wouldn't" and a "the" between "by" and "surge".
Stared the parenthetical phrase "more than that" with a comma and ended it with an ellipsis.
February 18 2009, 18:21:34 UTC 3 years ago
Possible Typo
“The Bastard’s got a point, he does,” the absurdly dressed one-eyed fop said to his estranged lover.As Fortunato is Liliana's ex (as far as we know), wouldn't it read 'her estranged lover'?